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Thursday, 4 June 2020

The weird mirror

Kia ora readers,

Today we will be showing you what we have been doing for tearm 2 writing. This tearm  we have been learning how to write a strong narrative. A strong narrative is believable, descriptive consistent. We can describe the setting and characters.


Today we did Sick Sentences. We changed boring sentences into strong descriptive sentences.
Here is one of my boring sentences
Anna sat down
Here is my changed descriptive sentences
Anna sat down on the cold hard Uncomfortable Concrete.

Here is a 2 boring sentences
Anna touched the mirror.
here is my changed descriptive sentences
Anna slowly reached to touch the mirror .

We have also been writing a story about a girl named anna

 here is my story I am not fished yet but here is some of it


Thank you so much for coming and visting my blog.How did you like half of my story?Have a great day
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5 comments:

  1. Hello Sophie.
    I have tried enlarging your story to make it easier for me but it's blurry.Is there anything you can do to make the text bigger?.Thanks.
    I would really like to read your work.

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  2. Hi Sophie its me Temera i'm just checking out your blog and I seen that you posted about the mirror story unfortunately I haven't finished off mine yeet. But anyways I think your blog was good. I think maybe you could do a little more work of the capitals but other then that everything is amazing BYEEE.

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  3. Hi Sophie its me Temera i'm just checking out your blog and I seen that you posted about the mirror story unfortunately I haven't finished off mine yeet. But anyways I think your blog was good. I think maybe you could do a little more work of the capitals but other then that everything is amazing BYEEE.

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  4. Hello Sophie.
    Just a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog tonight.

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  5. Hello Sophie.
    I am just leaving a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog tonight.

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